Indien American Dream < Korrekturlesen < Englisch < Sprachen < Vorhilfe
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Hallo Zusammen,
Ich muss einen Comment schreiben, ob Indien ein Modell für den American Dream darstellt.
Es wäre super, wenn mir den jemand korrigieren könnte. Ich habe die Frage auch auf uni-protokolle.de im Englisch Raum gestellt.
Hier mein Text:
The American historian James Truslow Adams defined in his book 'The Epic of America' the American Dream as 'the dream of a land in which life should be better and richer and fuller for everyone, with opportunity for each according to ability or achievement. It is not a dream of motor cars and high wages merely, but a dream of social order in which each man and each woman shall be able to attain to the fullest stature of which they are innately capable, and be recognized by others for what they are, regardless of the fortuitous circumstances of birth or position.'
On the one hand India profits of globlization and the technological development. India belongs to the ten political economies of the world. Globalization had enabled every second of enployable people to become IT specialist.
On the other hand the poverty level is at about 200-250 Million people. More than 80 per cent of India's population has to live with $1 a day.
India is devided in the parts. The first one is a very rich upper class, the second one is the middle class and the third part includes very poor, seriously ill people.
In no other country hunger people more than in India.
The distinguished definition of Adams does not really fit. It is true that India gets better and richer as a result of globalization but there are too many negative aspects.
For example there are millions of illiterates. It does not exist a structured educational system.
Only 300 universitiys are available for more than a billion men.
Another problem is the unequality of men and women. Men are more eminently respectable than women. Many marriages are no love marriages. The fathers marries their daugthers, this happens in 70 to 85 per cent.
As we can see India's version of the American Dream is no perfect model for the [mm] 21^{st} [/mm] century.
Liebe Grüße.
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(Antwort) fertig  | | Datum: | 21:59 So 23.11.2008 | | Autor: | mmhkt |
Guten Abend,
mir sind nur einige Kleinigkeiten aufgefallen:
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> The American historian James Truslow Adams defined in his
> book 'The Epic of America' the American Dream as 'the dream
> of a land in which life should be better and richer and
> fuller for everyone, with opportunity for each according to
> ability or achievement. It is not a dream of motor cars and
> high wages merely, but a dream of social order in which
> each man and each woman shall be able to attain to the
> fullest stature of which they are innately capable, and be
> recognized by others for what they are, regardless of the
> fortuitous circumstances of birth or position.'
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> On the one hand India profits of globlization and the
> technological development. India belongs to the ten
> political economies of the world. Globalization had (hier passte "has" besser) enabled
> every second of enployable ("to employ" - mit "m" also, wohl nur ein Tippfehler...) people to become (vielleicht noch ein "an" vor IT / ...dann hamse in Indien aber viele davon...) IT specialist.
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> On the other hand the poverty level is at about 200-250
> Million people. More than 80 per cent of India's population
> has to live with $1 a day.
> India is devided in the parts. The first one is a very
> rich upper class, the second one is the middle class and
> the third part includes very poor, seriously ill people.
> In no other country hunger people (ich würde das drehen: "...people hunger...") more than in India.
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> The distinguished definition of Adams does not really fit.
> It is true that India gets better and richer as a result of
> globalization but there are too many negative aspects.
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> For example there are millions of illiterates. It does not
> exist a structured educational system.
> Only 300 universitiys (fällt bei der Mehrzahl nicht das "y" weg und wird zu "ie" - also "universities"?)are available for more than a
> billion men.
>
> Another problem is the unequality of men and women. Men are
> more eminently respectable than women. Many marriages are
> no love marriages. The fathers marries {müsste m.E. "wed" (oder "to marry sb. off (to sb.) = jdn. (mit dm.) verheiraten) heißen - "marry" würde eher bedeuten, dass die Väter ihre Töchter heiraten, das tun sie i.d.R. wohl nicht. Zweck der Übung ist wohl umsichtiges verheiraten, damit man erstens die Göre los ist und noch was dafür einstreicht und zweitens, dass das Mädel ordentlich - was u.U. aus der Tochterperspektive ganz anders aussehen wird - unterkommt / Siehe hierzu auch bei www.leo.org oder www.dict.cc unter "verheiraten"} their daugthers,
> this happens in 70 to 85 per cent.
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> As we can see India's version of the American Dream is no
> perfect model for the [mm]21^{st}[/mm] century.
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> Liebe Grüße.
Soweit meine Anmerkungen - wie üblich ohne Garantie.
Schönen Gruß
mmhkt
P.S.
Wo hast Du denn deine winkenden smilies gelassen?
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Was ich noch verändern würde:
>It does not exist a structured educational system.
A structured educational system does not exist.
>More than 80 per cent of India's population has to live with $1 a day.
More [...] has about $1 per day to survive.
("has to live" hört sich arg eingedeutscht ein, ginge aber auch)
>The fathers marries their daugthers, this happens in 70 to 85 per cent.
Women/girls are being wed to [...] by their fathers [...].
Fathers wed their daughters [...].
Viele Grüße.
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Ich finde, dass sich der Text wirklich schlimm anhört...
