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(Frage) überfällig | Datum: | 19:20 Do 12.03.2009 | Autor: | beno717 |
Aufgabe | Aufsatz: Ganztagsschule in Deutschland |
Hallo zusammen,
ich wäre euch dankbar, wenn jemand meinen (total schlechten) aufsatz korrektur lesen würde:
In the last few weeks mass media have described, that a all-day school would improved the knowledge of pupils. That leads us to the problem, whether all-day schooling should be make compulsory in Germany.
In some respect the supporters of such an idea may right, because children will be looked after by an educator for all day long. Therefore parents can hold down a full-day job and so they can earn more money. Children could make their homework in school and teacher can help them, if they have any problems. Normally all-day school offer multifarious sports clubs like football or tennis and so children can continue to develop.
The opponents of this proposal point out the negative aspects, because the leisure of the children would be drastically limited. Maybe children would have learn after school, too. They coundn't choose their favourite leisure activities and would be dependent on the school offers. Furthermore children would be spend less time with their parents.
Taking all aspects involved into account I am of the opinion, that all-day schooling should be make compulsory in Germany. This reform would be disburden employed parents and the kids are meaningful occupied.
Also vielen Dank im voraus.
Beno
Ich habe diese Frage auch in folgenden Foren auf anderen Internetseiten gestellt: www.babelboard.de
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(Mitteilung) Reaktion unnötig | Datum: | 05:20 Fr 13.03.2009 | Autor: | matux |
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