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Korrekturlesen: Kurzgeschichte Teil2
Status: (Frage) überfällig Status 
Datum: 15:34 Sa 24.10.2009
Autor: MonaMoe

As it grew dark, he asked Lulu about her mother. `She always comes at seven, I have to be there before she arrives.` Peter brought her home and they hugged goodbye.
Then he strolled happily into his favourite bar. After Peter had ordered for a whiskey, he noticed a beautiful but sad woman next to him at the bar. Peter was very shy, but really wanted to know yet what happened to her, and because he, since he knew Lulu had become much more assertive, so he asked straight ahead. At first he was suprised, but then she told him that she just had lost her job. Peter never had to worry about his existence. His family was wealthy for generations. He had attended the best schools and now as a banker, he earned more than he needed. What he did not get was the affection, love and warm feelings of his parents. Perhaps that was the reason why he    
did not manage to establish his own family although he was in his mid fourties. Peter invited her for another drink and made constantly little, very funny jokes, so the woman began to laugh. Suddenly she looked at her watch and had to go immeditely. Peter wanted to bring her home, but she refused. Before she went home, she told him that her name was Liv.
The next day, Peter could not wait to finish work to meet Lulu in the park. To his disappointment, he was unable to find her, There was only a letter on the table. The letter was addressed to him:
Dear Peter,
I told my mom about you and she was not happy about it. Now she is furious and had forbidden me to meet you again. I resisted, whereupon she forbade me to leave the house. I cross the park everyday after school to go home, so I could leave you the letter there. Enclosed I will give you a picture.
Your friend Lulu.
It was the image, with the family he saw before. Peter was very sad, because he was alone again.
In his pub, he wrote a letter to his little friend. He told her about the new movie he had seen and was very sorry that she could not be there. On his way to work he placed the letter on the parktable. On her way to school Lulu found it. She replied with a letter on her way home. Time passed by.
At Lulu's birthday, he sent her three Mexicans to the front door, which sang a song for her and gave a gift from Peter, a pink sweater with cream-colored stripes. She was delighted, and declared to her mother that she had received it from friends. Lulu had no friends, she had only her mother and Peter.
On a sunny day when Peter went back through the park, he saw Lulu at her table. He was beside himself with joy and rushed to her. She smiled at him. `Hello, how is it that you're here?` He asked. Lulu was still only smiled at him and pointed her finger at a distant phone booth. Peter could see that a woman was inside. `Do you want some ice cream?` He asked. `A bullet strawberry, vanilla and chocolate`, came fired it from Lulu. Then Peter ran behind the next corner to the ice-cream truck and ordered two ice cream sundaes. He was glad to see the little girl again. However, when he ran back to the table, Lulu was gone and the phone booth was empty. Peter was unpleasantly surprised and even looked for a while on the table, until the ice began to melt and it ran over his hands, he had lost the appetite.
Back in his tavern, he ordered a whiskey. His boring day had caught him again. He felt lonely and drank.
The next moment, the bar door opened and a group of people came in, loudly entertaining inside. The two men and two women walked past the bar to one of the tables. When Peter was staring sadly at his third whiskey, he was awakened by a familiar laugh. He glanced behind him to recognize the group at the table and one of the women. It was the beautiful woman he met that evening at the bar. Liv had not seen him, then turned to Peter again and devoted himself to his drink. `How it looks life is constantly going up and down.`, He suddenly heard the familiar voice. Peter looked quite surprised, and his heart leaped as she smiled at him. `You are doing well?` He asked. `Yes, however, I got a new job as a switchboard operator, Monday I begin, so we celebrate a little. But what's the matter with you? So sad as your look out, I almost did not recognized you. Should to ask for another vacancy? `She said. `Oh no, I have already a good job`, Peter smiled. `You do not have to say it myself, but I owe you something.`, Said Liv. `A little guilty? No, you do not. Besides, I already had three drinks. ` replied Peter. `No, not just the drink. That evening, you have encouraged me and then I had courage to look for something new. You come to me and my friends at the table, maybe we'll distracted you a bit. `she invited him. Normally, Peter would have refused such an offer with thanks, because he was not accustomed to talking with a group of people. For this reason, he had been able to establish no relations, he lacked the courage to open. After three whiskey, however, he had enough courage to say to Liv: `Not that your husband scares me right back from the table.` `My husband? Oh no, these are just good friends. `She replied. All three friends were Peter instantly likeable. Liv was curious, would run as her new job and what conversations she could listen secretly. Sui her friend insisted that they all meet from now on every Saturday evening and Liv tells an exciting story. Then Liv agreed, but only under the condition that all would have a story to tell. A few drinks later, she said goodbye to her friends. Peter offered her again to accompany her home. This time, she would not hesitate to bring him home because she was in Peter's presence well, even slightly attracted to him. Nevertheless, she went alone, perhaps he just does not show these feelings. Peter was happy and warm and not only because of the alcohol. He had told many things and heard a lot of laughter. He was no longer alone, they wanted him to come back. Before he fell asleep, he wrote a letter to Lulu. He informed her of the beautiful evening and how happy he was about it. Then he fell asleep.
In the next week he thought of Liv and the next meeting. From day to day, he was excited and decided to ask his little friend for advice. Peter wrote to her that he had fallen in love and wanted to impress this woman now. How could he do that? What should he wear? "He knew that Lulu knew much about fashion, she was also his closest ally. Lulu replied the same day:

I advise you to a dark blue shirt and jeans. Your hair should look good and shave your beard. In addition, it would be nice if you spend her the drinks and give her a sense of understanding her.
Otherwise, you can be yourself, which would have been enough.
So much fun and then tell me how it was.
Your girlfriend Lulu

PS: When the evening was beautiful, you accompany her home, no matter whether she has any objection!


        
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Korrekturlesen: Fälligkeit abgelaufen
Status: (Mitteilung) Reaktion unnötig Status 
Datum: 15:20 Di 27.10.2009
Autor: matux

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